Can you revise some grammers and make good transitions between paragraphs

Can you revise some grammers and make good transitions between paragraphs? And also, find what causes gang and gun violence in school(with some quotations with bibliography:web address) and added in some where in my essay. In an era of the rising concern over public school violence, the controversy over the importance of mandatory uniform policy has been brought up as a debatable issue. Because of the controversial nature of this matter, those educators who advocate the uniform policy and those who condemn it are speaking out. One of the reasons that this issue was brought up is the degradation of school environment. Once considered sanctuaries of innocence and learning, American schools today are often perceived as dangerous places. The public recently has been busy by images of children shooting classmates and teachers, leading to fears that violence is becoming a horrifying "trend" in schools across the nation. Today, the main problems that cause school violence are gangs, firearms, and weapons. To reduce school crimes and enhance academic environment, some parents and school administrators, who believe that the uniforms will reduce gang activities, suggested enforcing the mandatory uniform p! olicy. However, their beliefs are misguided because the uniforms have no effects in contributing to a safer school environment; in addition, the uniforms bring further complex problems such as violation of the civil rights and economical problems. Instead of implementing mandatory uniform policy that causes additional problems besides school crimes, schools and the communities need to provide wiser procedures such as providing alternatives to gangs, restricting mass gun sales, and creating a visible law enforcement presence in the schools. These methods, unlike mandatory uniform policy, will not only prevent but also help in bringing an end to school violence. The leading cause of school violence in public schools today is ga...